Peer Review #7

A Response to Helena

Helena I thought your description of Ferdinand’s struggle on his sinking ship was beautiful! Your writing is amazing and i’m really looking forward to checking out the rest of your blogs! Your description of the lightning and thunder and the cold of the salt water is extremely evocative. Keep it up!

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Peer Review #6

A Response to Mariah

Mariah I thought your description of beauty was quite lovely. It’s amazing to see beauty in the distict uniqueness if people, and in simplicity. One thing I should tell you though, is that your sentance structure is slightly off through your italicised section. It makes it difficult to read, and ruins the flow of what would otherwise be a lovely passage. If you’re struggling to identify the issues, I would suggest reading it aloud to yourself as I find that the easiest way to identify issues in my own writing. I look forward to seeing more from you!

Peer Review #5

A Response to Lily

Lily, I thought your passage about Hippolyta showed a great understanding of her position; it’s obvious you really know the play! A couple of qualms I have are your overuse of the word “honestly”. Its small but I found it disrupted the flow of your first paragraph. Also make sure when you write your quote from Theseus that you fix up the capital letters so it flows with the rest of the writing! On a happier note I loved your ending. It was funny and speaks to Hippolyta’s quiet wit.

Peer Review #4

A Response to Ngaire

Your passage actually helped he understand Bottom’s soliloquy better. I previously hadn’t considered the idea that Shakespeare seeks to portray a sensationalism that can only be experienced through a story, rather than expeirenced oneself. Your explination of the way in which Bottom accentuates the innability of the human senses to comprehend what has happened to him helped me understand the soliloquy better. Thank you!

Peer Review #3

A Response to Christella

Christella, you have demonstrated a great understanding of Hermia’s anger. I wish you had explored the language that Shakespeare uses in your letter, as I feel it would make the letter seem more congueous with the actual play. Other than this I ejoyed your letter. You’ve incorporated all the parts of Hermia’s story that are relevant to the subject. Good work!

Peer Review 2

A Response to Emma

Emma-

I enjoyed your review as it really opened my eyes to some of the casting choices. Specifically my criticism of the way Cleopatra was caste. Your description of the casting as being relative to their mental ages and a way in which to further modernise the play was something I had not understood upon watching the play, and writing my own review. It explains a lot of Cleopatra’s manerisms and expressions that I had criticised. Thanks for opening my eyes a little!

Erin

Peer Review 1

A Response to Raina

Hi Raina!

First off, I just want to say I’m realy glad you were so inspired by Cleopatra! I too find her to be an amazing woman and her portrayal in Shakespeare’s Antony and Cleopatra has cemented her as one of my favourite female characters in literature. I would have liked, however, for you to go into more detail about why you find her so empowering. I understand you admire that her steadfast approach to her country in the wake of Antony’s unstable emotions but I want to know why she inspires you “as a woman” as you say. I personally find her manipulative side interesting and believe it speaks to her strength in her context and am interested to see if you agree!
One final note; take care with your spelling! Calved/carved was the one i picked out – not that my spelling is perfect!

Looking forward to seeing more from you!
Erin